Isaias a Wonderful Scholars Goals
Our group goals are : Most beautiful kite, largest kite and best team work. Our group will win the Largest Kite on June 24th, because our kite will show a combination of qualities, such as, shape, color, and form, that pleases the aesthetic senses, especially the sight and our kite will show the use of our imagination and original ideas, especially in the production of an artistic work.
My group will also win the most beautiful kite competition on June 24th because our kite will show an arousing awe through being evoking admiration through size, and skill. It will also show inspiring fear and respect through being impressively powerful in beauty, also it will show magnificence.
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